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Ice Cream Fall > Commenting on the script > My thoughts
by: Raul Valge

The script left me a bit confused.. We see the couple at present time, arguing and eventually breaking up. We're shown a flashback of how they met. And then the girl suddenly dies.. Just like that.. What happened to her? Why did she die? There seem to be some references that she's ill "She is holding her side." and the boy texting "Let me help.", but still they are very vague. And why did they break up? The point of the short was lost to me..
1025 days ago | 1 Thumb-up 
I think the audience should be told of the illness before the break-up. Then it would probably be easier to understand that the boy doesn't know about it. Maybe the text messages could be used to explain the story in the end.. He would probably send multiple messages over time. At some point he would find out about the illness, and there could be a message telling that. And saying that he wants to help no matter what.. There could also be some kind of a response from the girl before the end, to make things a bit more positive.. But all this could make things too obvious.
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Ice Cream Fall > Commenting on the script > My thoughts
by: Raul Valge

The script left me a bit confused.. We see the couple at present time, arguing and eventually breaking up. We're shown a flashback of how they met. And then the girl suddenly dies.. Just like that.. What happened to her? Why did she die? There seem to be some references that she's ill "She is holding her side." and the boy texting "Let me help.", but still they are very vague. And why did they break up? The point of the short was lost to me..
1026 days ago | 2 Thumb-ups 
Hmm.. okay. This is a problem. The argument is supposed to be the girl leaving the boy (not telling him that she's ill and about to die). It's hard to do this without being too corny and I would want to make it comprehensible enough but still being a bit like "What's happening!? Is she leaving him? Why?!" and the illness being revealed to give the audience a clue for interpretation. Maybe I should try to underline somehow a lit more the fact that she left him to have him not see her downfall so to speak. I'm not sure whether the short, when shot should be TOO easy to understand. Maybe it should require two views. But it really isn't supposed to be impossible to understand either :/ Of course the hospital drip bag at least should underline the illness enough, but the break-up should be a bit more understandable for the audience?
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Ice Cream Fall > Commenting on the script > My thoughts
I will soon wish to put up a task for actually filming / making the film. I myself am interested only mainly in the writing part of it. Before that I would like some comments on how to maybe better the script (INCLUDED HERE) What should be changed? This doesn't include the girl's name and obituary which is being dealt with in it's own Task. Is there some huge problem with the script? Is it filmable? Are there parts that I have failed to communicate so that they can be understood without too much interpretation - not too randomly? Does the film need something more concrete? Is something UTTERLY STUPID?
1026 days ago | 2 Comments | 3 Thumb-ups 

The script left me a bit confused..
We see the couple at present time, arguing and eventually breaking up.
We're shown a flashback of how they met.
And then the girl suddenly dies.. Just like that..
What happened to her? Why did she die?

There seem to be some references that she's ill
"She is holding her side." and the boy texting "Let me help.",
but still they are very vague.

And why did they break up?

The point of the short was lost to me..

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Ice Cream Fall > A pre-poster to be used on Wreck-A-Movie > ??? What kind of poster ??
by: Peter Lampinen

What kind of poster ?? idd have a idea for a poster I could sent to you by some how...
1030 days ago | 0 Thumb-ups 
jep jep täytyy kattoo
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Ice Cream Fall > A pre-poster to be used on Wreck-A-Movie > ??? What kind of poster ??
by: Peter Lampinen

What kind of poster ?? idd have a idea for a poster I could sent to you by some how...
1031 days ago | 1 Thumb-up 
Peter: Millainen idea? Julistehan oli tosiaan kuvailtu tuossa englanniksi: Käytettäväksi tod.näk. vain Wreck-A-Moviessa, jotta saataisiin ihmisiä houkuteltua projektiin. Oma ideani olisi se, että siinä näkyisi se hiekkainen jäätelötötterö jotain kirkasta (esimerkiksi valkoista tai valoisaa puistokuvaa) vasten. Ehkä niin, että tytön käsi juuri nostaa tai pitelee sitä. Ja siis lähetettyähän sen saat aika kätevästi? Uploadaat jonnekin ja eikö sen pystynyt laittamaan ihan tänne Shottiinkin mukaan? Painat vain shottia laittaessasi tekstilootan alta, että "Attach media to your Shot" tjs. :)
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Ice Cream Fall > Name for the girl and the obituary > Girls Name / Obituary
by: Mark Back

I know a girl with a name I've always liked. "Sarah Di-Bella" "Sarah" is Hebrew for "Princess" and "Di-Bella" is Italian for "of Beauty" Emily Dickinson wrote many poems about death and love...one which I've always liked is: My life closed twice before its close; It yet remains to see If Immortality unveil A third event to me, So huge, so hopeless to conceive, As these that twice befell. Parting is all we know of heaven, And all we need of hell. Hope some of this helps/provides inspiration. Thanks, Mark
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I like the name, but it might be too exotic for this film. Also it's perfect that you told me it's meaning too. I might use this if I don't get even better ones from other people. Gotta check out some more Dickinson too. The obituary should be shorter than, for example that poem, maybe a part of one. Also I'd love it to have a bit more message (like "Sarah Di-Bella" had). :-)
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Mark Back gave a shot "Girls Name / Obituary" for Ice Cream Fall
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Ice Cream Fall > Name for the girl and the obituary > Girls Name / Obituary
As you might see in the script, the girl has a name like Anna Anonymous. She would need a name with a bit more of character and credibility. What could it be? Also the obituary needs to be perfected. I'd rather have it involve a quote about death and love from another (rather well-known source) of popular/ higher culture. Everybody help me here! Once I get this in the script, I should dare to call it finished and add new Tasks. :)
1033 days ago | 1 Comment | 2 Thumb-ups 

I know a girl with a name I've always liked.
"Sarah Di-Bella"
"Sarah" is Hebrew for "Princess" and "Di-Bella" is Italian for "of Beauty"

Emily Dickinson wrote many poems about death and love...one which I've always liked is:

My life closed twice before its close;
It yet remains to see
If Immortality unveil
A third event to me,
So huge, so hopeless to conceive,
As these that twice befell.
Parting is all we know of heaven,
And all we need of hell.

Hope some of this helps/provides inspiration.
Thanks,
Mark

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Ice Cream Fall > A pre-poster to be used on Wreck-A-Movie > ??? What kind of poster ??
Anybody interested in making a poster to be used here? It would be used to attract people to the project and. if it's good enough, as a final poster for the finished film. Why not? I myself think that it might feature a sand-covered ice cream picked up or held in a hand, with a bright white background or with a blue sky or a park in the background. If you get a different idea from the scripts current version (INCLUDED), feel free to give it a shot :)
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What kind of poster ?? idd have a idea for a poster I could sent to you by some how...

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Anybody interested in making a poster to be used here?

It would be used to attract people to the project and. if it's good enough, as a final poster for the finished film. Why not?

I myself think that it might feature a sand-covered ice cream picked up or held in a hand, with a bright white background or with a blue sky or a park in the background.

If you get a different idea from the scripts current version (INCLUDED), feel free to give it a shot :)

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Simo Raittila created a new production "Ice Cream Fall"

Ice Cream Fall was supposed to be a dark romantic comedy about death and young love, but turned out a emotional, sobby and a bit experimental script about a girl and a boy.

It tells a story how they meet due to the boy dropping her ice cream cone on the ground. It doesn't tell the story of their year long relationship. It tells the separation and the sad end. The illness left untold and death.
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When I write I see the 'complete film' in my mind's eye. This one I saw in multiple parts focusing on something else than the actual story. The whole thing also circles around a huge gap in the narrative. The point is to keep the viewer well in the dark but offer enough clues for interpretation and funny moments to make it a worthwhile watch.

Leaving the audience in the dark should be even annoying (from time to time). The film is supposed to invoke strong emotions: laughter, nostalgia of young love, sadness.