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Okay, first of all this is a solid start for Conniption. It would be nice to see more from this studio.

Feedback as requested:

Good Stuff:

+Camera work nicely cinematic, there were no cheesy home movie style shots. Also nice to see so many fixed shots without any wobble or zoom or panning, fixed shots get a bad press from some people but they can work really well.

+The actors were all right for their roles, no one seemed miscast. The hitman really did seem like a hitman (or at least a cinemagoer's idea of a hitman), maybe it was the sunglasses but he reminded me a bit of Agent Smith from the Matrix.

+Script was competent, no clunkers.

+Action scenes pretty well handled, the choreography was up to scratch.

+Costumes and styling all appropriate to the characters.

+Music and soundtrack was generally well mixed (but see below about certain dialogue).

+Locations well chosen, none of it looked cheap or contrived.

+The hitman's tormented dreams were interesting, is it his own internal guilty conscience at work or is it something supernatural and external? I would keep it ambiguous if that comes up in any sequels, it's more interesting to let the audience interpret it their own way.

+Thank you for telling me I have no life ;-)

Stuff that might need fixing:

-Some of the dialogue was a bit hard to make out, for example the two women chatting in the kitchen. A bit muffled.

-In some ways it's a victim of its own competence, it's perhaps a bit too close to a commercial film. You're indie producers so you could do stuff that commercial films can't do, it might be interesting to use that to your advantage.

-The dream sequences were effective but both a bit long, it might work better if there was just one long and one short one (either way round) or two short ones.

-That long, long walk away from the body by the car was an interesting and good shot but it perhaps didn't fit the pace of the film. It felt more like an end-of-episode shot. I love the shot, I just don't know if it belongs in that part of the film.

-The scene where the men attack the hitman was a bit unclear, the fight seemed to come out of nowhere. Was it meant to be confusing? (If so then ignore this, just want to make sure.)

-When the various characters cough up blood there's maybe a tiny bit too much of it, it's getting close to schlock horror levels which would be fine in a deliberately camp film but doesn't fit the serious realistic tone of Blacke Revenant.